I was unreasonably happy Nicky's name had an accent at all, so no worries!
So, you know what's a trope I detest? People not talking to each other - I know, I know, considering what I prompted, it sounds unbelievable, but it's true. The point I am trying to make: I love that they talked. Absolutely adore it. Even more because they are actually digging themselves deeper, but in a way that makes perfect sense! It's perfectly in-character, too! Also, with the way you write their dialogue, I could read 20 chapters of them just talking (though I immensely appreciate the NSFW parts, too!). The moments where they were at loss for the right terms was beautiful!
Loved Nicky's POV and what we could see of Yusuf - loved that he's rather casual about the whole situation in spite of having less general experience.
Loved Nicky's reflections and the glimpses of his backstory we got. Why do I have a feeling we'll be itching to break Lazzaro's nose, eventually? Scratch that, I'm itching about that already.
There are simply too many wonderful sentences for me to point out a favorite, I'd just end up copying and pasting the whole chapter. Wonderful work!
Re: Give An Inch (Fall A Mile): Joe/Nicky, Moving Goalposts (4/?)
I was unreasonably happy Nicky's name had an accent at all, so no worries!
So, you know what's a trope I detest? People not talking to each other - I know, I know, considering what I prompted, it sounds unbelievable, but it's true.
The point I am trying to make: I love that they talked. Absolutely adore it. Even more because they are actually digging themselves deeper, but in a way that makes perfect sense! It's perfectly in-character, too!
Also, with the way you write their dialogue, I could read 20 chapters of them just talking (though I immensely appreciate the NSFW parts, too!). The moments where they were at loss for the right terms was beautiful!
Loved Nicky's POV and what we could see of Yusuf - loved that he's rather casual about the whole situation in spite of having less general experience.
Loved Nicky's reflections and the glimpses of his backstory we got. Why do I have a feeling we'll be itching to break Lazzaro's nose, eventually? Scratch that, I'm itching about that already.
There are simply too many wonderful sentences for me to point out a favorite, I'd just end up copying and pasting the whole chapter. Wonderful work!